Sunday, January 25, 2009

THE MEETING POINT

The awaited eyes
The clumsy bus stand
Wishes in every half breadth'd sigh
And the pain in my thighs

The calm and quite attire
The arriving moment of each desire
The cold sweat in afternoon
The pulse rate was higher

The impassionate touch of a pure soul
I felt like m dressed for a ball
The innocence of ur face
Reminds me of some memories of grace

The eternal bless, i must confess
The missing belt of my black dress
The slant eyes strangely watching me
Mixed feelings of d joy of feeling free

The feeling of sitting by my LOVE
As earth lie bare to heaven above
The warmth of a pure soul, while holding his hands
Made me feel like m alone on a lovely Island

Walking with him on a calm road
Talking wid him in an entirely mute mode
Sipping a cup of coffee together
in a cool and romantic weather.........(to be continued)
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27 comments:

  1. RajJanuary 25, 2009 at 8:46 AM

    Its a really very touchy poem !!!!
    i am really waiting for the next part ....

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  2. roushanJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:19 AM

    appears to me a romantic portrayal of the feelings arising from deep down the heart .. Keeps me eagerly waiting for the continuum...

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  3. vikash singhJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:25 AM

    Nicely composed in a very simple word and very strongly express the theme.

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  4. vibhuJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:38 AM

    a wistful dream of the maiden identity....
    dont know much about poems,just that i know how tough it is to express dreams...u did it,hope u realize it..SOON...goodluck

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  5. dipikaJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:45 AM

    oye sahi...........

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  6. Shweta..January 25, 2009 at 9:48 AM

    e- bahi log ..bach k rene ka ..
    idar thora sa khiskela hai...
    pyaar ka jhamela hai..
    duniya me aise ich sab koi thakela hai..
    bas sahi batane ka biru..
    ye poetry to mast likhela hai..
    [;)]
    oops.. sorry dis s a blog n i forgot to be decent enough to comment..
    Truely, ma hands folded n dreamed f d words written n found maself in Seventh Heaven really.
    very nicely scribbled,hoping for more f dem..
    gud luck
    :)

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  7. BirajashisJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:49 AM

    Shilpi, You are such a splendid writer, it is beyond my imagination. This is really impressing,just brilliant. Keep up. I want to read more. Can I see you in the form of another Arundhati Roy for Bookers or Jhumpa Lahiri for Pulitzer, What will happen to those IT people?
    Web:http://www.geocities.com/birajashis/Profession.html

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  8. UnknownJanuary 25, 2009 at 9:49 AM

    beautiful yaar, awesme, lovly. truly deserve a big praise
    mast hai yaar
    sahi mein

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  9. adi..a..true..cancerianJanuary 25, 2009 at 10:10 AM

    awesome poetry... long time since anyone has penned something sensual without being sexual...
    the whole piece seems trimmed in a rosy hue...fabulous the way you create such intoxication in so sober an atmosphere..proves how little things go such a long way in making our lives complete and bestowing upon us that tiny bit of enlightenment that allows to recognize our true selves and our hearts desires... all in all, keep up the good work an hope to see a famous complement to this already prized prologue :)

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  10. UnknownJanuary 25, 2009 at 11:06 AM

    kya baat hai boss.....phor dala......to b continued ko hata kar continue kijiye....i m very excited 2 read d climax(end)...no doubt in saying u would b d next shakespeare!!!!!!!!

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  11. UnknownJanuary 25, 2009 at 11:13 AM

    hey dear...really a grt work....gud mixture of words.
    its jus awesome awesome n awesome.

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  12. raviJanuary 25, 2009 at 7:58 PM

    walking ka spelling wrong likhi hai tu :D vaise jis bus stand main tu kisi ka wait kari thi main bhi usi bus stand main kisi ka wait kiya tha .... and i can understand wat this poetic marvel means :)

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  13. AnonymousJanuary 26, 2009 at 4:47 AM

    beautifully composed...describes the nascent feeling of love..speaks a lot of a girls feeling on meeting her love...wonderful work yaar..u do have a lot of potential...

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  14. AnonymousJanuary 26, 2009 at 8:24 AM

    my god....never even knew dat u rote...n d 1st one took ma breadth away.....sai me man me bs ek hi bt aa rai h....
    "kash mera b koi hota...jisk sath mai ye feel krti"
    its wonderful dear...

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  15. UnknownJanuary 26, 2009 at 9:46 AM

    hey!!!
    i guess im one of the persons who knew d situation well
    nywaz
    gt8 job done frnd...keep gng

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  16. MonikaJanuary 26, 2009 at 10:21 AM

    it's really awesome..it's difficult to believe it's really yours..!!! and when r u going to reveal the suspense of "to be continued..."???

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  17. SharadJanuary 26, 2009 at 10:46 PM

    good poem....

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  18. PrityJanuary 27, 2009 at 4:43 AM

    aah.. n this is awesome :-P

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  19. UnknownJanuary 27, 2009 at 5:01 AM

    too good yaar...

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  20. Ritesh RanjanJanuary 27, 2009 at 6:55 AM

    yaar ye sach me mast hai....
    ispe teri tang nhi khichunga.....

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  21. UnknownJanuary 27, 2009 at 7:59 AM

    awesum

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  22. UnknownJanuary 27, 2009 at 8:38 AM

    heyyy...i swear this is amazing,awsm....
    xtrmly nice...plzzz climax jaldi likho coz i jst cant resist to read dt part...nd yeahhh keep up the good wrk...cheers..nd luv

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  23. UnknownJanuary 27, 2009 at 11:06 AM

    hi
    gud work dear........
    i didn't know ur dis syd dat u compose so well......

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  24. UnknownJanuary 28, 2009 at 5:17 AM

    wow.......so its so kewl nd at d same time touchy description........
    seriously dat seems to be cumin 4m sum1 core of heart.............
    plz write down wat happened next.......its beautiful

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  25. UnknownJanuary 28, 2009 at 5:47 AM

    good composition my frnd......
    i dnt knw dat u hav such gr8 n hidden talents in u.......lovely..
    keep rockin

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  26. UnknownJanuary 29, 2009 at 12:03 AM

    awesome yaar..i din knw u r such gud in poetry..
    its so touching..
    very nice..

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  27. UnknownJanuary 29, 2009 at 2:59 AM

    yar seriously teri poem to dil ko touch ker jati h.it's very touching..........
    gud........
    it's beautiful....

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